Comments for Distance Collaboration in Logan County http://logancountydualcredit.wordpress.com Flattening the world of Logan County through online collaboration Fri, 19 Dec 2008 15:42:46 +0000 http://wordpress.com/ hourly 1 Comment on Alternative is Better than the Original by Chadd Gartin by aleighamoss05 http://logancountydualcredit.wordpress.com/2008/12/16/alternative-is-better-than-the-original-by-chadd-gartin/#comment-163 aleighamoss05 Fri, 19 Dec 2008 15:42:46 +0000 http://logancountydualcredit.wordpress.com/?p=101#comment-163 Great job on this paper, Chad. There's not really much to be left out. The only thing that I can see is what Tiffany said earlier about the parenthetical citations. Besides that, this is very well written! =) Great job on this paper, Chad. There’s not really much to be left out. The only thing that I can see is what Tiffany said earlier about the parenthetical citations. Besides that, this is very well written! =)

]]> Comment on Illegal Drivers-Whitney Loggins by zachv15 http://logancountydualcredit.wordpress.com/2008/12/16/illegal-drivers-whitney-loggins/#comment-161 zachv15 Thu, 18 Dec 2008 15:55:15 +0000 http://logancountydualcredit.wordpress.com/?p=112#comment-161 I feel that this paper is a little difficult to follow because at the beginning you are talking about teenagers obtaining their driver's licenses and then you jump right into statistics about immigration that don't really fit. Some of the paragraphs are a bit long, but overall, it was a good essay. I feel that this paper is a little difficult to follow because at the beginning you are talking about teenagers obtaining their driver’s licenses and then you jump right into statistics about immigration that don’t really fit. Some of the paragraphs are a bit long, but overall, it was a good essay.

]]> Comment on Illegal Drivers-Whitney Loggins by zachv15 http://logancountydualcredit.wordpress.com/2008/12/16/illegal-drivers-whitney-loggins/#comment-162 zachv15 Thu, 18 Dec 2008 15:54:15 +0000 http://logancountydualcredit.wordpress.com/?p=112#comment-162 I feel that this paper is a little difficult to follow because at the beginning you are talking about teenagers obtaining their driver's licenses and then you jump right into statistics about immigration that don't really fit. Some of the paragraphs are a bit long, but overall, it was a good essay. I feel that this paper is a little difficult to follow because at the beginning you are talking about teenagers obtaining their driver’s licenses and then you jump right into statistics about immigration that don’t really fit. Some of the paragraphs are a bit long, but overall, it was a good essay.

]]> Comment on Sexual Orientation: Born or Bred? by zachv15 http://logancountydualcredit.wordpress.com/2008/12/16/sexual-orientation-born-or-bred/#comment-160 zachv15 Thu, 18 Dec 2008 15:48:40 +0000 http://logancountydualcredit.wordpress.com/?p=124#comment-160 The opening paragraph is a little confusing to me. I understand that it gives an example of the ridicule that homosexuals feel, but the essay is really about how sexual orientation is determined. It just feels a little out of place to me. The opening paragraph is a little confusing to me. I understand that it gives an example of the ridicule that homosexuals feel, but the essay is really about how sexual orientation is determined. It just feels a little out of place to me.

]]> Comment on Illegal Drivers-Whitney Loggins by tbg2009 http://logancountydualcredit.wordpress.com/2008/12/16/illegal-drivers-whitney-loggins/#comment-159 tbg2009 Thu, 18 Dec 2008 15:45:32 +0000 http://logancountydualcredit.wordpress.com/?p=112#comment-159 I thought the paper was well written and the reader was very informed of what the paper was about. It's a great topic to write about, but I felt that the thesis could have been better stated so that readers had a better idea of what you were jumping into from the start. From time to time it can be a little scattered, so if I were you, I would try to stick to one topic at a time and clear up the relevant facts before you jump into another one. There were a few grammar mistakes and spelling errors, but overall, this paper did have a lot of potential. I thought the paper was well written and the reader was very informed of what the paper was about. It’s a great topic to write about, but I felt that the thesis could have been better stated so that readers had a better idea of what you were jumping into from the start. From time to time it can be a little scattered, so if I were you, I would try to stick to one topic at a time and clear up the relevant facts before you jump into another one. There were a few grammar mistakes and spelling errors, but overall, this paper did have a lot of potential.

]]> Comment on Matt C.- Why Are We Different? by rachaelbooth http://logancountydualcredit.wordpress.com/2008/12/17/matt-c-why-are-we-different/#comment-158 rachaelbooth Thu, 18 Dec 2008 15:42:01 +0000 http://logancountydualcredit.wordpress.com/?p=134#comment-158 This is a great essay. Your topic was great, and you stayed with your main points. I really liked it. This is a great essay. Your topic was great, and you stayed with your main points. I really liked it.

]]> Comment on Sexual Orientation: Born or Bred? by tiffanycf http://logancountydualcredit.wordpress.com/2008/12/16/sexual-orientation-born-or-bred/#comment-157 tiffanycf Thu, 18 Dec 2008 13:13:42 +0000 http://logancountydualcredit.wordpress.com/?p=124#comment-157 Good introduction, it really makes me want to keep reading to see what you have to say. Good introduction, it really makes me want to keep reading to see what you have to say.

]]> Comment on Gambling: Right or Wrong? by Jasyn Blankenship by stevenk12468 http://logancountydualcredit.wordpress.com/2008/12/16/gambling-right-or-wrong-by-jasyn-blankenship/#comment-156 stevenk12468 Thu, 18 Dec 2008 03:47:51 +0000 http://logancountydualcredit.wordpress.com/?p=105#comment-156 "At first legal gambling was praised by communities. " - Comma after "At first". ~~~~ Good job! “At first legal gambling was praised by communities. ”

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Good job!

]]> Comment on Sexual Orientation: Born or Bred? by stevenk12468 http://logancountydualcredit.wordpress.com/2008/12/16/sexual-orientation-born-or-bred/#comment-155 stevenk12468 Thu, 18 Dec 2008 03:38:58 +0000 http://logancountydualcredit.wordpress.com/?p=124#comment-155 The first paragraph where you are talking about the boy surrounded by four other children is a little out of place to me. You kind of start it out as a story and then start writing your paper. Maybe you should italicize it or something. That way it makes it look like a somekind of foreword or something. Other than that, it was written well. The first paragraph where you are talking about the boy surrounded by four other children is a little out of place to me. You kind of start it out as a story and then start writing your paper.

Maybe you should italicize it or something. That way it makes it look like a somekind of foreword or something.

Other than that, it was written well.

]]> Comment on Corrupted Assistance by stevenk12468 http://logancountydualcredit.wordpress.com/2008/12/17/corrupted-assistance/#comment-154 stevenk12468 Thu, 18 Dec 2008 03:29:38 +0000 http://logancountydualcredit.wordpress.com/?p=129#comment-154 "Beginning in Britain in 1601 the Poor Laws were introduced and designed to assist unemployed people find jobs." - Try adding a comma after "1601". --------- Nice topic. Very well written. Good luck! “Beginning in Britain in 1601 the Poor Laws were introduced and designed to assist unemployed people find jobs.”

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Nice topic. Very well written. Good luck!

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